Aravind – The White Tiger

White Tiger

The second-person narrator, Balram Halwai, is a boy who wipes tables in a bakery in a poor village in India – a bakery his grandfather once owned but which was seized by a rich person. His father now pedals a rickshaw. Such is the tale of corruption and class oppression this book tells. The poor are like roosters in a coop, so tightly confined to their status for so many generations, they come to accept their lot as destiny, hence the caste system. It’s a dark, hopeless world-view.

Balram can read and write however, and in a series of letters to the prime minister of China, he tells his autobiography. Why that correspondent? No reason. It’s just a literary device to justify the clunky second-person voice.  Unlike in The Reluctant Fundamentalist, where the second-person point of view was artistically justified by the narrator’s need to be heard without argument from his powerful listener, in this case, the point of view seems merely a gimmick, and I found it distracting.

Balram vows to escape the darkness of poverty, corruption, and oppression. He finagles a job driving taxis, then being a chauffeur for a wealthy man in the city. He describes his life as a lowly servant in a rich household, treated not unkindly, but with contempt. He has escaped his village but not the rooster coop. There is no escaping the rooster coop. The author describes a grim society with social and economic class differences so institutionalized they do seem like destiny.

Balram does eventually escape the rooster coop by murdering his master, stealing a pile of money, and fleeing to live as a fugitive in a big city, no longer a rooster, now a white tiger. He gets away with it and prospers. The message is: there is no natural way to break out of your social position in India except through radical violence. All other pathways are closed. Successful emotional conveyance of that message is the triumph of the novel.

The bright, sardonic humor of the narrator creates a light tone to contrast with the dark mood of the themes, and that contrast is the best feature of the book. The portrait of hopelessness at the bottom and vapidity at the top is well-painted, though obviously exaggerated.

And exaggeration is the reason why overall, the book is less than perfect. Yes, poverty is awful. Yes, it’s hard to break out of your social class. Yes, corruption is disgusting.  But the same could be said of any developing country. The same could be said of America.

To change your social class, the best route is education. There’s also military and government service, and there’s cleverness in commerce, and plain hard work and frugal living. Millions have done it all those ways. Our hero, however, was a drunk, a drug-user, a thrice-convicted jailbird, and a cynical, delusional, sociopathic manipulator. His whining about not being able to catch a break did not garner much sympathy from me, and his violent, criminal solution was not justified.

Yet the character wasn’t bad-ass enough to live a life of crime. He was a docile servant all his life until that decisive day (which was not well-motivated). So he’s neither a noirish anti-hero nor a triumphant everyman. I don’t know what he was. Maybe a white rooster.

Adiga, Aravind (2008). The White Tiger. New York: Simon & Schuster/ Free Press (275pp).

Cobwebs Out

Silver CityThe revision of “Robin,” the second android novel, is done. It’s a big improvement over the first draft, but it’s obvious there will be another re-write. As is my style, the story is too complex and I struggle to write a synopsis.  A logline is out of the question. I should write the synopsis and logline before I even start outlining. Good idea, but not possible. First drafts are written into a fog, of necessity.

I have a list of changes that can radically refocus the story but I haven’t got the energy for it. My brain has cobwebs.  I’ll let the manuscript marinate. It has value to be unlocked but it, and I, need a rest.

Meanwhile, I’m using a big stick to beat back agent interest in my first android novel, The Newcomer. I got a request for a full from an agency in California. They apologize for failing to respond sooner (I sent the query letters out last May), saying my query got lost in their in-box. They want to know if I’ve found representation yet. That must be one helluva slush pile if it takes from May to September to get through it.

It’s wonderful to be noticed, but it goes against every atom in my body to decline an invitation from an agent, though of course I will. I haven’t heard peep two from my agent since we got rejected by a top-of-the-heap publisher at the start of the month. Being in the dark is the worst.

In a few days I travel to Silver City, New Mexico to attend a regional book fair. (www.swwordfiesta.org/). Silver City is a charming old mining town that has re-invented itself as an arts community. The speakers look good, and it’s a pleasant day trip from Tucson.  I’ve signed up for an author’s table so I can sell my two self-published mystery novels (bit.ly/Wasnt-Me and bit.ly/Hunter-Hunted). I’ll have a dozen CreateSpace paperbacks with me, since it’s impossible to sell ebooks in person.  It will be a little adventure to blow the cobwebs out.

 

Weir – The Martian

curiosity-mars-roverAn astronaut is injured in a dust storm on Mars. His crewmates give him up for dead and head home. Miraculously, he survives (some extreme hand-waving is needed to explain that). He makes it to the inflated canvas habitat left behind and must figure out how to survive for 4 years until the next Mars mission arrives. He’ll need food, water, shelter and air. Can he do it?  Of course he can; that’s the whole point of the book. There is never any question that he will survive, so the only dramatic tension is from the question, how will he do it?

He uses plenty of ingenuity to craft solutions to his various problems. As  Robinson Crusoe had lots of gear from the shipwreck, the Martian has plenty of equipment and supplies left behind by the 5 crewmates.  He just needs to attach this hose to that valve, and so on, which he does, in extreme and repetitious detail.

Are there problems and crises? Of course. He’s got two (count ‘em!) Mars rovers left behind and while they don’t exactly get a flat tire, you know from the very start there will be equipment failure.  His crewmates left because of a Martian sandstorm. Do you think there will be another sandstorm?  Take a guess.  The canvas habitat is inflated. Could it possibly leak? What are the odds?  Mars is very cold. Can he find a reliable source of heat?  I’ll bet he can. The expected is fulfilled, and the unexpected is entirely expected. Will he get sick, burned, cut, or break his leg?  Not a chance.

The character is a smart-talking, joke-cracking, quasi-military NASA engineer with all the personality, reflectiveness, and subtlety you would expect of such a character. The story is told mostly through his daily journal entries, which puts the reader at considerable distance from the action and emotion of the events and contributes to the overall sense of flatness. A tiny bit more interest is generated when the story cuts to scenes at mission control on earth, though not much, since those people are the identical character type.

Oddly, his greatest motivation is a longing to communicate with other people, (which he eventually does accomplish). That need is his only sincere motivational driver. He is quite cavalier about his need to survive. But we don’t know why he has this need to communicate. He is not a reflective person, is emotionally inexpressive, with no strong memories of relationships he longs for, and anyway he seems to have nothing to say except to describe the machinery. There is no explanation of his need to communicate because the character has no interiority, no psychology, no subjectivity. He is a hollow shell of a man.

The story is entirely external and object-oriented. It is not a human story. There is no character development, and the plot is a foregone conclusion. What does that leave? Kind of a technical manual: How to Fix Your Mars Rover.  For those who enjoy reading technical manuals, this novel can be recommended.

Weir, Andy. (2011, 2014). The Martian. New York: Random/Crowne/Broadway. (435 pp).

 

 

Different Point of View

Indiana Jones

I’m still struggling to focus my latest android story on my lead character, Robin, one of two androids. I’ve put her on stage more frequently and tried to keep the spotlight on her. I changed an important dramatic crisis by swapping the roles of the two ‘droids so she had more air time than the male. Still, the story is a slow burn, with evildoers who won’t let her be, but she’s not a character driven by internal desire. There still is no MacGuffin and I’m halfway through the revision. And worried.

I can claim distraction for some excuse. My computer crashed again, hardware failure again, this time the keyboard, which renders it fairly useless for writing a novel. So it’s gone to the shop and I’m back on my ancient but reliable clunker. (Hint: Beware of HP Spectre 360, manufactured jointly with Microsoft). Fortunately, after a previous hardware disaster, I paid up for a continuous cloud backup service, so I haven’t lost a word.

And then I got zombies in my air conditioning. The system comes on at random times, day or night, even though the switch is set to “off.” Since the problem is intermittent, the repair guy says, “Everything checks out fine.” More maddening technology.

I’m afraid Robin is never going to be a traditional Aristotelian hero. Her main motivation is self-preservation. She is victimized by many forces but she is not raiding the lost ark; she is the lost ark. Different point of view.

I will eliminate her business partner and put her in the top spot so she can suffer the slings and arrows coming around soon, and I’ll give her the central role in the reversal of fortune at the end. It will be quite obvious that she’s the main character of the story, but she will never be Indiana Jones.

The trouble with creative work is that you never know if you’re being original or stupid.

Watts – Blindsight

Blindsight_(book_cover)This sci-fi adventure gets points for creativity. A small crew from earth investigates an alien ship somewhere out in the Oort cloud. The stimulating questions include, how would you communicate with aliens, and, what are the aliens like?

Usually in sci-fi, the alien is an unimaginative variant on a human, like E.T., or an insect or mollusk, or some combination of those. Not very alien at all.

Watts’ aliens are alien. How about non-biological entities that feed off electromagnetic energy? I have to admit I had a little trouble picturing them and their behavior. If you’re going to have really alien aliens, you need to put a ton of effort into describing them.

The more interesting question is how would you communicate with aliens. Where do you even start? Carl Sagan was pretty sure any alien would recognize the spectrographic signature of hydrogen and his team engraved a representation of that on the Voyager spacecraft, presuming that any alien would have visual, pictorial perception, would be committed to elementalism in analysis, and other assumptions.

Watts assumes that any aliens will be susceptible to tribalism, so you can make one alien suffer while the other observes, then take note of the communication between them, on the assumption that they’re talking about the ordeal. Maybe, maybe not.  I’m skeptical that tribal feeling is universal. But points for originality.

A central concept of the novel is the Chinese Room, a thought experiment proposed by philosopher John Searle in the 1980’s to illustrate why strong AI is not possible. People outside a room feed questions written in Chinese into a slot. Inside the room, a person who cannot read any Chinese takes the slips of paper and pattern-matches the figures in a big book, and copies out answers found there. He slips the answers out the slot.

Observers marvel at the intelligence of the Room for giving such wise answers. Searle’s point is that there has been zero comprehension of any questions or answers, as the man in the room cannot read Chinese. He has simply performed a mechanical matching task. The same would be true for any computer that purported to pass the Turing test. Despite the performance, there would be no actual intelligence in play.

In this novel, the on-board linguist suspects that the aliens operate like the Chinese room. Despite elaborate and meaningful conversation, she believes the alien entity understands nothing and may not even be sentient. Fascinating idea.

Taking the idea even further, the protagonist and first-person narrator is a man who has had half his brain removed so he completely lacks empathy (you have to accept that empathy is “located” in one half of the brain). Consequently, he understands next to nothing of social intentionality but has an uncanny knack for detailed observation and can deduce people’s meanings from their behavior. He is essentially a Chinese Room.

He is also the main reason why the novel doesn’t work as a story. A narrator who understands nothing is a very tough challenge, and Watts doesn’t overcome it. In fact all of the characters are trans-human, modified in various ways to optimize special abilities, but for the reader, it’s like trying to empathize with six garden tools. For example, the captain of the ship is a genetically modified vampire (you have to accept that vampires are real). Again, points for creativity, but none for character engagement or storytelling.

Plenty of stimulating ideas in biology, physics, neuroscience, cognition, and perceptual psychology fly about, but as coruscation, contributing little to development of story or character.

Ultimately, even the framing theme of the Chinese Room doesn’t hold water if you think about it. There is a homunculus inside the room right from the start, the genuinely intelligent, Chinese-literate  human being who wrote the big lookup-book that enabled the pattern matching. Just because that person’s intelligent cognition was recorded for deferred execution does not make it disappear. Many people, even philosophers, are confused by that simple misdirection.

The real challenge for building a genuine AI is specifying in the first place what intelligence is.  A similar argument can be mounted concerning another central theme, that of blindsight (a blind person who believes he or she can see). We need to ask, what is seeing?

As a story, Blindsight meanders, nor is it successful as a character study, nor does it present new understanding of AI. But in terms of sheer technical creativity, I’d say it’s worth a read.

Watts, Peter (2006). Blindsight. New York: Tom Doherty Associates (384 pp).

 

One Day’s Work

diggingI finished the synthetic outline of my latest android novel. That’s an outline made after-the-fact, by writing a brief synopsis of each of the 33 chapters. In reviewing it, I discovered redundancies, excesses, omissions, and nonsequiturs.

Redundantly, I had refuted the Kurzweilian singularity twice, once on grounds that intelligence is non-computational, and the second time because a brain upload would be a non-functional snapshot. I’ll probably keep both arguments, but it’s nice to know they’re both in there, in different chapters.

A more serious error was late in the manuscript when I just solved the problems, removed the threat, and restored the status quo. Dramatic tension plummeted to zero. Why did I do that? The story was far from over. I subsequently introduced a new threat but there was a gaping hole where my tension had flat-lined.

And then I had a whole section, about one and a half chapters, focusing on a completely irrelevant theme. Fascinating stuff, I’m sure, but obviously an alien invasion from a different story. How did that even get in there? It will have to be cut.

This is first draft syndrome. It’s horrible, but you have to remind yourself that at least it exists and you can’t edit nothing.

I sketched a flow diagram on big sheets of 11 x 24 paper. I entered each main character’s name in a circle then drew arcs between them labeled with the kind of interaction they had. Sometimes the arc would go from a character to a block of narrative, to indicate the kinds of arguments and discussions that were covered, since this story is basically an inquiry into ideas.

That took five big pages of flow-diagram to show the progression of the story line. I spread those out on my desk and started again on a single sheet, this time, leaving out all the secondary characters and including only the major dramatic beats. That resulted in seven clusters of interaction, including an unnecessary bulge on cluster #3 from that irrelevant material mentioned earlier.

The result was a pretty good story line, intellectually engaging and dramatically interesting, I had hoped it would become obvious from the diagram who was driving the story. Except for the two villains, the characters work together collaboratively on common goals, and despite their squabbles, they defeat the bad guys and emerge wiser and happier. The triumph of the collaborative life?

My dissatisfaction with the story calls into question what storytelling is supposed to be. I believe the art and craft of storytelling are to stimulate a re-imagination of some aspect of the multi-faceted human condition.

What did I want to say? I thought it was the story of Jennifer the shaman, who starts out believing she’s on an epistemological quest with her two androids, but ultimately discovers that she really wants to overcome her sense of alienation from community.

So I set out to sketch that story, from her point of view, but it wasn’t happening. I tried to force it but that made things worse. In frustration, I looked back to my one-page flow diagram and it became clear that it was Robin’s story I was trying to tell. She’s the female android.

I had not seriously considered that the story could be Robin’s because as an android, she has no feelings, no intuition, no creativity, no genuine subjectivity, and only computational simulations of social empathy and sense of personal agency. How could somebody like that drive a character arc?

But she already did it. The story is hers, more-or-less. All I have to do is blur a few details around the edges and she’s a perfectly good vehicle for the story.  I made a list:

What is Robin’s Goal? What she wants more than anything.

What is her Need? The reason that goal is so important to her.

What is her Blindness? The weakness that causes her to misperceive herself and her situation.

What is the Opposition? The force that keeps her from her goal.

What is her Rubicon? The moment where she is trapped and makes a largely irrational, irrevocable decision.

What are her personality contradictions? How does she inadvertently reveal her weakness in behavior and attitude.

Once I had that list, I could see how the action diagram I had made flowed from her quest. More or less. I can glimpse it. It’s a long way from a glimpse to a rewrite.

I spent all day on this, from 7:00 am to 5:00 pm, eating at my desk, drawing little pictures. For a whole day’s work, I have one idea: It’s Robin’s story. I’m delighted to have that, but also frustrated: Why the hell didn’t I just write it that way the first time around? Creativity is a confusing, difficult, messy process. I’m glad I have the freedom to indulge it but I get impatient with the 99% of it that’s just hard, slogging work.

Hall – Speak

Speak-Hall

Six characters write diaries and letters, along with the transcript of a conversation, all presented in rotation. There are no dramatic scenes in real time, and no plot. Everything is remembered and told from afar through a haze of maudlin emotion. Each character whines self-serving excuses and descriptions of having been put-upon. In the absence of genuine dialog, there is no pushback to this self-indulgence and the stink quickly becomes overpowering.

In one thread, a thirteen-year-old English girl writes into her diary as she crosses the Atlantic in the 1600’s. She has reluctantly agreed to an arranged marriage and her dog has died. So she writes witlessly at great length  about that, without insight or keen observation. Randomly chosen example:

14th. At dinner, spoke to father again. Asked for funeral for Ralph. Rejected, on theological grounds. Soulless animal: no other world in which Ralph is still living. Much loved, good life, etc. But soulless animal, and body washed away by sea.

The girl’s diary is found in a modern library archive by scholar Ruth Dettman. She supposedly edits the diary for publication but provides no opinion, interest, facts, or context. Why or how she edits the diary is left a mystery.

Her husband Karl allegedly incorporates some of the ideas from the diary (Which ideas? There are no ideas!) into his developing AI program, an algorithmic conversationalist called MARY. They disagree about how much linguistic autonomy the software should have (not defined), because there are laws against “illegal levels of AI” (unexplained).

Karl Dettman’s letters are addressed to his wife, all in italics for no reason that can be discerned, but making them difficult to read, and written in an appalling second-person voice in which narrative exposition is thinly disguised as memoir, a style so clunky that I wondered if it was supposed to be humorous. There is no insight into the creation of an AI program with “too much” AI. What a tragic lost opportunity.

Random example:

“For a year, from my weather station, I wrote you letters. You never wrote back. After a year, the war eneded. You learned that your family, your mother, your father, your grandfather, and your little sister, had all been killed. Several months later a package came for you in the mail…”

Why is he telling his wife in a letter that her family was killed? Was she unaware? Astonishing.

Ruth’s letters are addressed to him, in the same tone, and whine on and on about how he became obsessed with his work, distant, and uncommunicative, so naturally, she had to leave him. Gripping stuff.

Then there’s the thread of letters from Alan Turing to the mother of a recently deceased friend. These letters allude vaguely and very lightly to the major incidents of Turing’s life as known in popular culture, such as the cracking of the Enigma code and his arrest and punishment for homosexuality, but virtually nothing – remarkably nothing at all – on his greatest invention, the Turing Machine. Instead, he rambles on about complete trivia in an utterly unconvincing voice. Random example:

“You’ll remember that I was never much good at sports, but to run it seems all one needs is an interest in counting one’s footsteps. I go outwards from town, through the countryside, and when the blood begins to beat in my ears, I sometimes hear Chris’s voice. When I grow tired, I lie down in the pastures amongst befuddled sheep, and I summon Chris to help me sort through the strand of numbers crossing the sky. …”

Then there’s Stephen Chinn, an entrepreneur who designed a talking doll using Dettman’s AI conversationalist, but since it had “too much AI,” Chinn is in prison in 2040, and copies of evidence against him are the “transcripts” of conversations between one of his talking dolls and a girl, Gaby. These transcript are mind-numbing and reveal nothing whatsoever about the character of the AI, the little girl, the crime committed, or the nature of AI language processing.

Random example:

Gaby: My best friend is seeing a therapist. My mom just otld me today. Apparently it’s “helping.”

MARY3: I see.

Gaby: She’s been unfreezing. According to her mom she’s definitely getting better. She’ll be back in school in a month.

MARY3: How do you feel about that?

Gaby: I don’t believe it. If it’s true, it makes me want to throw up.

MARY3: Aren’t a lot of girls getting better, after talking to therapists?

Once again I am naively astonished at how the power of marketing can turn nothing into something.

Hall, Louisa. (2015), Speak. New York: Harper Collins (306 pp).

Tell Your Own Story?

shamanI’ve broken my own rule about letting a new manuscript marinate for a couple of months.  My recently completed android novel was calling out to me from the darkness of its disk drive. It lacks a traditional story structure and I thought it shouldn’t be allowed to “set up” like that.

I’m now going through it chapter by chapter, writing a 65-word synopsis of each, listing the scenes (usually only one, but sometimes three). After ten chapters, my feeling is that the story is not half bad as it is.

My main characters are androids. By definition, they do not yearn for any MacGuffin, nor do they churn within from internal conflict. They calmly investigate the human condition and try to stay hidden. Sure, there are bad guys pursuing them, so their main motivation is to avoid being caught and to escape when they are.

Without that burning desire to drive the action, and without the Achilles’ heel to trip things up, there can be no final catharsis. Also, there’s two of them working in collaboration, not one central MC. Not normal.

Do I care about this lack of traditional structure? I worry about it. Readers expect an Aristotelian story, or, lacking that, redeeming lyricism or imagery. Mine is a story of ideas and observations. That’s satisfying enough for me, but probably not for most people.

Maybe I should re-write for MC Jennifer, creator of the androids and a human with normal human emotions and motivation. With a 3P-limited narrator I could still get inside the heads of the androids, but it would be her journey. Probably that’s more like what people expect.

Teachers always say to write the story you want to tell, not what you think people want to hear. But that may not be good advice. When I get to the end of the synthetic outline, I’ll see what building materials I have to work with and what would have to be added to tell Jennifer’s story. If she had one. Which she doesn’t. But could.

Trottier – The Screenwriter’s Bible

Screenwriters-Bible,200_This “Bible” is very informative, detailed, well-organized and accessible; more comprehensive and with a wider range of examples than Syd Field’s classic, Screenplay.  On the other hand, it’s nearly 500 pages of 8.5” x 11” text, so it’s formidable. Despite that, it wears its organization on its sleeve and is easy to navigate.

Five “Books,” or sections of about equal length, describe and discuss various aspects of writing and selling your script. The first three sections cover basic principles of storytelling, how to write a script (or any compelling story), and a style guide for scriptwriting – mainly for movies, but also television. A fine section in the middle gives many good and bad script examples with a “scriptwriting consultant’s” commentary. You’d pay thousands to glean this information from an actual consultant, or even to attend a conference with this level of  detail. The last section is on how to sell your script, a more difficult process than writing it in the first place.

I enjoyed the first two sections most, the principles and methods for telling a good story. I’ve read dozens of books on these topics and have written several novels, yet I still struggle. Trottier’s approach adheres closely to Aristotle’s Poetics, probably still the best how-to-write guide ever. Trottier is especially strong in simplifying character motivation, and offers some useful worksheets.

The Style Guide de-mystifies the arcane rules of formatting a screenplay, and emphasizes simplicity in a spec script, as opposed to a production script. He wisely emphasizes that the spec script should avoid virtually all editing and camera direction and just tell a good story.

The final section on marketing (sales are pre-supposed), is daunting indeed. I should be so lucky to get that far. But having marketed several novels and even agented one, I can say that his advice is helpful and one-hundred-percent solid in my experience.  That doesn’t make it any less of a mountain to climb.

Despite its overall strong organization, the book is a compendium and often reads like a set of laundry lists without much connecting tissue, and sometimes topics seem out of order (like introducing the character/action grid after discussion of the draft revision), and sometimes just inserted at random (like a brief description of a hero’s mythical journey).

In the center of the chapter on how to write your script, helpful preparatory outlining procedures are described then there’s this:  “Step 6 – Write your first draft.”  That’s it! That’s like the famous recipe for rabbit stew: “First, catch the rabbit.”

Actually, all the detailed information you need to execute “Step 6” has been previously discussed, though this is a glaring example of lack of connecting tissue. This “Bible” is more of a reference guide than a step-by-step how-to, but the attentive reader can put it all together and maybe that’s better than trying to follow a recipe.

Trottier, David. (2014) The Screenwriter’s Bible, 6th Ed. Los Angeles, CA: Silman-James Press (442 pp).

 

Inner Space Ship

BraininAVatThe characters in my latest android story did not want to quit. It took longer than I anticipated to tie up loose ends and bring the thematic material to a conclusion.  I ended at 77,500 words, about what I’d had in mind. Two to three thousand words will come out with the next wall-to-wall edit, but I often have to add a paragraph here, a scene there, so I expect to net around 77K.

Is it any good?

I think it says what I wanted to say, at least. I wanted to ask the question, must human consciousness be embodied – either in flesh or silicon?  How would consciousness behave if it weren’t embodied? And how would both human and android consciousness react to that?  I’m satisfied with that exploration.

In my recent autodidactic sci-fi reading I’m not finding, so far, many writers exploring such questions seriously. I’ve found some good discussions of consciousness in Peter Watts’ Blindsight, and in Luisa Hall’s Speak. Watts, for example, brings up some interesting linguistic ideas that indirectly invoke Chomsky’s 1950’s generative grammar, and he discusses Searle’s 1980 thought-experiment of the Chinese Room. Those are worthy topics, but they’re only represented in hand-waving, not fully explored. Still, I’m glad to see any serious discussion of consciousness in popular fiction.

Hall’s story invokes the Turing test (the “imitation game”), but again, without unpacking its many complex implications. She also develops in some detail the attribution problem, in which humans readily attribute consciousness to any speaker who seems linguistically competent. Without naming the source, she invokes the tone and style of Weizenbaum’s ELIZA program of 1955, an algorithmic non-directive therapist that many people (college students) believed was sentient because it echoed keywords of their statements. Frustratingly, Hall exploits the attribution problem without addressing it.

Those are just two examples I happen to be aware of right now of popular fiction that seriously explores the nature of consciousness. Most sci-fi about AI is too superficial to be taken seriously. (Dick’s Do Androids Dream of Electric Sheep? is an exception).

My story gets into the deep weeds of consciousness pretty quickly. I question, for example, the organic emergence of tribal feeling out of tacit intersubjectivity. I could have pursued topics like that further, but I reminded myself that I was already pretty weedy, so I got out as soon as my characters allowed it.

Is there a readership that will eschew ships to outer space for inner exploration of consciousness? Don’t know.